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#1
17-12-2006, 06:18 PM
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| Festival of Lights - First Candle Hello everybody! I am very proud to present my very first composition I have wrote using pen and paper (computer, actually). As it is Channukah now, the tune is rather holiday-ish. It is written for a flute, 2 Bb clarinets and a basson, and lasts for 1:47. It's a first draft, and more will come later (hopefully). I hope you'll enjoy it!  |
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#2
17-12-2006, 08:02 PM
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| Hi there and welcome to Music-Web  Well for a first composition it isn't too bad, although I have some critiques. The idea is good, and alot of the motifs are well written. Although, many of your harmonies are in octaves. This has the potential to create a certain dull atmosphere. IMO there are many different and more varied ways to create harmony, and many of them are much fuller and more colorful. Well, that's all I can really say for your 1:47 or so of music  |
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#3
18-12-2006, 12:51 PM
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| Likewise - Welcome. And it's a great start if your first. I tend to agree with Will about the harmonies could be a little more varied - in a year's time you'll maybe re-visit this with a little more experience and change it somewhat. It has the pace of a light festival piece and the only thing it lacks is dynamics and accents that would give it real flare - this is almost certainly because of the computer rendering. What software were you using? Like, I mean, it should be possible to emphasis each instrument's entry by accenting the beginning of the phrase then letting it fall back a bit to blend with the others. Example, something enters at around 0:25 that says "Hey, I'm adding to this!" but it can hardly be heard. And a flute or clarinet enters at 0:41 with a short descending run before adding melody to the ensemble at 0:44. It was clear enough because it came in full-left in my earphones but those 3 or 4 descending notes leading in tended to reduce its effect. It just needs a bit more volume at 0:44 to announce itself, then fall back a notch or so. But overall, a great start. Reith Last edited by reith : 18-12-2006 at 12:56 PM. |
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#4
18-12-2006, 12:56 PM
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| I remember so well one of my first pieces! Like Reith said every piece is part of the big learning curve that you are entering into. Luckily your journey will not be as lonely as some peoples. You have friends here to help you |
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#5
18-12-2006, 01:31 PM
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| Thank you for listening. Reith: I'm still not very familiar with accents and dynamics, so that is the reason why they are absent. I guess it's time to move on to my next composition! |
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#6
20-12-2006, 04:27 AM
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| Nice piece. Very vocal in character. The octave harmonies make it sound a bit bell-like, which is appropriate for this time of year. Good job! Victor. |
